Blurbs & Book Covers

I agree, the first two paragraphs are great, the third is just slightly less interesting. However, I don’t really have too much feedback for it.

"As the storms battering the coast of Navarón and the waters surrounding Alintera worsen"  This is a good beginning of a sentence, however I feel like it lacks--I don't know if this is the right word, but--tangibility. Like perhaps instead you could do "As storms batter the coast of Navarón and the waters surrounding Alintera grow restless" (and that doesn't sound particularly original, but I think you get the point.) Something to immerse the reader in the setting.

The only other thing that I thought you could play around with was starting your last sentence with an ‘And.’ I don’t think it’s necessary, but you may want to experiment with it. The reason I brought it up is because when you put an ‘and’ somewhere it’s kind of like saying, “We have to do this, this, and this. Look at all the things we have to do in order to save the world.”

That’s all for now!

~Sofia

P.S. I love Azul's name!!!! Nerida's too, but you know.

I love the blurb and the cover, but I do have a couple of suggestions. For the cover, I feel like the rose is a little hard to see at first glance--which is great if it's what your going for, but if not than maybe 'lifting' the rose a bit could help? Like adding some shadow behind it, kinda? I think there's an effect that you can apply to text and elements on Canva that does it for you. (don't know if that actually makes sense...) I love that you used Cinzel (or is it Cinzel Decorative? Sometimes it's hard to tell), totally one of my favorite fonts, but I found that the left side of Fiendish was a little hard to read, probably just because the background changes a lot on that side of the word. I don't know if maybe lifting that too could help? (Again, I don't know if this is... actually beneficial advice, but...)

For the blurb, there was only one thing I found confusing: Why is the feline creature potentially going to loose his deteriorating humanity? Why is it deteriorating?

And that's about it from me.

Hello again,

I thought I’d come again since you changed it, I’d come back and say a few things.

First, I really feel like the blurb flows a lot better now, so thanks for implementing those changes (now I feel like that one meme of Obama giving himself a medal).

And now it’s time for me to grammar police all over you. There’s just one thing I’d like to mention: ‘her kingdom was suffering from the loss of their rulers’, since it’s in the past tense, while the blurb rest of the blurb is in present tense. I feel like it should be ‘her kingdom has been suffering’ or ‘her kingdom has suffered’ instead. Unless Moonflower Valley is actually doing quite well at the minute economically and socially, in which case I’m sorry. 😔

Also, I hate to be this person, but The Black Forest is already the name of a forest in south-western Germany. So unless your book is set in the real world and Moonflower Valley was actually France this entire time, you might want to consider changing the name.

Bitte sehr und viel Spaß beim Schreiben! 🇩🇪

(I apologise in advance to any native German speakers/people who can speak German competently who had to bear witness to my horrible attempt at speaking your language.)